Wednesday, March 19, 2014

Dragon's Whisper Snippet

So I can post more often, I've decided to start posting story snippets and flash fiction. Here's a scene that will probably get my beta-readers hunting me down with pitchforks.


Sonra stood at the end of the street. She held perfectly still, searching through the chaos. The stench of fear assaulted her as she looked. So many lost souls.



But they were not her mission. With sharp eyes she continued to scan the streets. She caught a glimpse of her target, but he disappeared behind the flick of a dragon tail.



She moved down the street, passing through both man and dragon. When she reached them, the dragon stood over the man, blood fouling its claws.



Sonra willed her physical form to appear. “Get away, Ralistye.”



The dragon flinched and snarled. “You cannot tell me who I can take. We have been given free rein. And I have previous ties with this one.”



“That does not matter. Get away.”



Ralistye withdrew from the man and flapped off, screeching as he went. Sonra knelt next to the man. A sliver of information was allowed into her mind. His name was Tyrim. He had indeed had interaction with Ralistye, but that was in the past.



Fatal violence flickered around him. He wouldn't last much longer. She reached toward him, silently requesting healing.



Her arm jerked back. He was not to be healed.



Her attention was drawn to the shell of a young girl in Tyrim's arms. Already gone. Sonra longed to touch her and heal her, but her arm was deadweight.



The girl was not to be healed, either. Nor was the mother who lay near.



Her attention was drawn back to Tyrim. He still had a few minutes left. A few short minutes.



Her fingers tingled as she knew what she would be allowed to do. She focused on Tyrim and his departed family and blinked. When she opened her eyes, they were in a quiet part of the forest.



She settled onto the ground next to Tyrim. The pain, confusion, and guilt in his eyes made her wince. “Have peace and feel no pain.”



The pain instantly faded from his eyes, but the confusion and guilt remained. They struggled within his eyes for a moment before guilt won over.



His gaze fell on the empty body of the young girl in his arms. He pulled her close to him and tears wet his cheeks as he murmured to her. The regret flowing so freely from him gave Sonra pause; she had to take a moment and push it away.



“You have no reason for regret. Have peace.”



He didn't notice. “I'm so sorry … If I could only tell you … If I had only tried harder …”



Her purpose here grew clearer. This she could do. “This is not your fault –”



Another flash of information.



“ … Nor is it punishment. You asked for forgiveness, and it was granted.”



Tyrim calmed slightly, and a hint of fear mixed with his grief. Though it slipped underneath a moment later, it was still there. He trembled with conflict and weariness.



A sudden revelation hit him, and panic joined the emotions assailing him. “My daughter …”



An impression was given to Sonra. He had another daughter. And for the moment, she was well. She was protected. “Your daughter is well. She is alive. She is being protected.”



He relaxed and slumped to the ground, the panic eased.



Sonra could feel his strength fading, could see his lifeblood seeping out of him onto the ground. She kept her eyes on him and prayed. Prayed for peace. For a gentle passing. For his family to be waiting for him.


Sonra reached out and softly touched his shoulder, praying to be allowed the ability to ease his passing.



The slightest shimmer of peace came from him as his breathing slowed, then stopped. Even in physical form, Sonra saw the air shimmer above the discarded body. She focused, listening.



A laugh. A true one. Full of joy and a peace that couldn't be grasped in the fallen realm.



Not just the laugh of man, but of a woman, a little girl, and a young man.



Sonra breathed deeply and smiled. It was well.






Sunday, March 16, 2014

Review - Brain McBride's Paradox

Allrighty. I KNOW I haven't posted much. As usual. I wish I could promise to do better, but I can't. I have enough trouble writing regularly as it is.

BUT. Anyways. Today I have a quick book review of Brian McBride's Paradox, book one of the Starcrafters' Saga. You can get it here:

http://www.amazon.com/Paradox-Starcrafters-Saga-Brian-McBride/dp/143279843X/ref=sr_1_1?s=books&ie=UTF8&qid=1394995803&sr=1-1&keywords=paradox+brian+mcbride

I'm not completely sure how to do this, but I'll give it a shot.

Overall, I love this. The world was wonderful, the kind that gets a hook in your brain and won't let go until you're done. The combination of more modern and medieval technology is unique.  I ripped through the book in one day, and re-read it sooner than I usually do.

The characters could have possibly been fleshed out a bit more at first. For a while at the beginning, David and Jake seemed to kind of smoosh together into what felt like a single character. As the story went along, though, they seperated and turned into good, realistic characters. I especially liked Hannah.

There was one plot twist that I felt the characters didn't react strongly enough to, and that made it feel ubrupt. I felt a bit jilted by it. The characters actually grieved less than I did.

A similar thing happened with the general writing style. It was choppy and lacking in the details department at first, but once I reached the end, it was leaving me breathless. The writing at the end was amazing.

Overall, this was wonderful. I loved it, and I can't wait for the second one. I'll give this book four stars.

(Edited to add: I cannot believe I forgot to mention this. *sheepish grin* The violence. There are endless opportunities for the violence to get graphic and gory. And it seems inevitable with so many ghouls, gremlins, dragons, vampires, werewolves and demons and big battle scenes. But Brian does an amazing job of keeping it from getting too detailed. Something very noteworthy, considering how easily he could have tossed in as much gore as he wanted.)


Sunday, March 2, 2014

Cover Playing

I haven't been around much. Sorry. My posts will probably be rather brief for a while. Since I'm hoping to get Dragon's Whisper self-published within the year, I need most of my free writing time for that. Besides, when you put that much effort into one project, it's hard to feel inspired for anything else. But to make up for it, I'll post a few mock covers for Dragon's Whisper.



(And as you can probably tell, I haven't decided if I'm going to use a pen name or not.)
Well. Back to Dragon's Whisper!

Monday, February 17, 2014

The Return of the Inner Evil Author

Inner Evil Author has been fairly well-behaved for the last few weeks with Dragon's Whisper. But wowee, I should have known better than to think that would last. My beta-readers are going to kill me. It's a very good thing I have my writing cave of feels to hide in.

Sunday, February 16, 2014

A Crazy Idea

I have had a crazy idea. It won't leave me alone. This might be called a plot bunny. Or it might just be considered insanity.

What if I wrote a short prequel for my current WIP? Just the thought ... *shudder* It is frightening. But it makes sense. I've read a bunch of articles lately about what a good idea short, free stories are. It would make sense for my situation. Prime the pump for when I self-publish my novel.

I think I shall go hide under my bed and try to ward off the plot bunnies now. HELP.

Wednesday, February 12, 2014

Self-Confidence ... Again

I still haven't gotten the hang of this "standing on your own work." (Thank my mother for that quote.) A quick glance at a list of fantasy cliches sent my recently recovered self-esteem down the drain. Oops. But something I'm wondering - Does any author ever learn how to "stand on their own work" and stop caring if it's "officially" cliched, or if they get a bad review? Even the New York Times bestsellers.
Writers are perfectionist--people-pleasers.

Saturday, February 8, 2014

Self-confidence

I NEED to get better about posting more often. Maybe I'll get this someday.

But for a topic for today. This time, I actually have a somewhat good one. I've been working on my Y/A Christian fantasy novel, and a few critique partners had suggested I change a certain event. I took their advice and edited a major event out of the first few chapters. It took away some major character development, too.

Then I sat back and looked at the chopped version. And I discovered something.

I hated it. I had just neutered my story. I took someone else's advice for it, and it was no longer mine. Something was gone out of it. Some of its heart. The spirit of the thing.  So I restored it to its original condition and breathed a sigh of relief.

Now, this doesn't mean that taking all advice is bad. It's a good thing. You need outside opinion. Dragon's Whisper would be a hunk of junk without all the beta readers and critique partners.
But taking a bit of advice and using it for your purposes is different than taloring your story to fit everyone's opinion.

Not only will you kill yourself trying to please everyone (It's impossible!), you will no longer have YOUR story. It'll be everyone else's story. It won't be yours.

Your should be writing for YOU. Not for the market, or to make everyone else happy. It's great if that happens, and if you enjoy yourself and write a great book, it usually does. But it shouldn't be your goal.

So, this blog post was slightly longer! (And I'll hopefully get better at posting regularly.)